of Character Twilight Fan Fic? WARNING: contains drug references, other mature themes, no sex

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5455366/1/Tartarus
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5455366/1/Tartarus
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5455366/1/Tartarus

feedback please
I AM AWARE THAT I CAN POST AN ORIGINAL STORY, i do not want to post an original story, as of yet,

thats what fan fiction is about taking a story, and making it yours.

I don't feel i'm ready to post an original story yet, and there will be some elements of my fanfiction that are based on the Twilight Series, just because you don't see them yet, doesn't mean they won't happen

all i wanted was feedback, on grammar, plot etc. not on my posting choices